Super valid, I appreciate the feedback! For my own future reference, if you have an answer—was it more the general kind of casual/eclectic style, the “antagonistic” bits like what you quoted, or something else?
Oh huh I completely skimmed past that on first read & didn’t even notice it, but revisiting it after seeing this comment, I also find it off-putting. Could capture most of the good and none of the bad with something more like “Buckle up, you have no idea what you’re in for!” which feels (appropriately) like an invitation to a wild tour, rather than a “you fucked up.”
Feels weird being told to shut up when I hadn’t said anything.
Definitely the antagonistic bits—I enjoyed the casual style! Really just the line ‘ Sit down. Sit down. Shut up. Listen. You don’t know nothing yet’ I found quite off-putting—even though in hindsight you were correct!
Very reasonable, noted and thanks for explaining! FWIW my intended vibe there was humorously overhyped—like that I, a stranger, was bursting into your life to tell you about trees—but also definitely see why it would be offputting.
Super valid, I appreciate the feedback! For my own future reference, if you have an answer—was it more the general kind of casual/eclectic style, the “antagonistic” bits like what you quoted, or something else?
Contra, I found it really funny and it made me want to read the post more. Also the end bit with missing the forest for the trees was hilarious :)
Oh huh I completely skimmed past that on first read & didn’t even notice it, but revisiting it after seeing this comment, I also find it off-putting. Could capture most of the good and none of the bad with something more like “Buckle up, you have no idea what you’re in for!” which feels (appropriately) like an invitation to a wild tour, rather than a “you fucked up.”
Feels weird being told to shut up when I hadn’t said anything.
Definitely the antagonistic bits—I enjoyed the casual style! Really just the line ‘ Sit down. Sit down. Shut up. Listen. You don’t know nothing yet’ I found quite off-putting—even though in hindsight you were correct!
Very reasonable, noted and thanks for explaining! FWIW my intended vibe there was humorously overhyped—like that I, a stranger, was bursting into your life to tell you about trees—but also definitely see why it would be offputting.
As an additional data point, I thought it was fine and my interpretation matched pretty well to the intentions you described.