I have no problem with making Draco’s character more consistent, and if Eliezer honestly feels that that should mean removing or altering his casual dehumanisation of peasants, so be it.
But I urge Eliezer to seriously ask himself, with all his strength as a rationalist, about this and any other changes: “Would this be sacrificing the quality of the narrative for the sake of making a very, very mature story superficially more marketable to children?”
And yes, I feel those apparently charged words are wholly appropriate: removing a rape reference is just a terribly superficial way of making the story ‘kid-friendly’, because it isn’t kid-friendly in much, much deeper ways. If a kid isn’t ready to know what ‘rape’ means, would you want him to read Chapter 82? Or the Bellatrix chapters? If anything the rape reference in Ch. 7 works as an excellent gatekeeper, filtering the audience before the really disturbing stuff begins to kick in.
I agree, and will be more blunt: making that change strikes me as the kind of thing a conservative Republican Christian home-schooler parent would do to their children’s books using Liquid Paper and an ink pen, rather than something that a rationalist — who understands that someday kids need to realize that the world sucks and human beings do awful things to each other — would do to his own story, which he has made abundantly clear is intended for adults.
Eliezer should simply advise those parents not to read the story to their children, unless they’re absolutely certain that the children are ready for grown-up subject matter.
Leading HPMoR’s list of kid-unfriendly points: the question “what extenuating circumstances could make it right to torture an innocent person to death” is integral to the plot. Even if everything else that can be mangled into a toned-down version is so mangled, the result will merely be more artistically compromised, not more kid-friendly.
On the other hand, the definition of kid-friendly keeps changing. The Hunger Games trilogy includes (somewhat indirect, but still quite clear) references to prostitution (both in poverty-induced despair and as a result of human trafficking), as the cherry on top of the whole “children being forced to murder each other” plot line.
I would still suggest changing the rape reference for character consistency reasons. At least, Draco shouldn’t think of it as “rape”—ISTR studies show that even real life rapists typically find some “she was asking for it” rationalization for their attitudes. MoR:Draco does an excellent job rationalizing pro-Death-eater attitudes later in the fic. A pro-rape rationalization might be different in that Harry ought to be able to see through something so appalling immediately, but from Draco’s PoV there ought to be some self-justifying framing to it.
And yes, I feel those apparently charged words are wholly appropriate: removing a rape reference is just a terribly superficial way of making the story ’kid-friendly
I didn’t think it was kids that that particular removal was trying to make the story more friendly to.
In Ch. 7, the Harry-and-Draco conversation needs to be toned down even further because multiple parents have announced their intention to have their children read this fanfic – and I know that revision is going to be controversial, but Draco’s current conversation is also a little out-of-character by the standards of the Draco in later chapters.
This is an explicit statement that the concern about kids reading MoR is what is prompting the revision, with minor considerations about Draco’s character being secondary.
Only just figured out my inbox =] at the time I wrote that, I was new to fanfic, and had literally never realized the negative effect rape-as-plot-device could have on some people. Just looked at the chapter on hpmor and noticed Eliezer didn’t put a trigger warning, which I find surprising.
Strongly agree with this.
I have no problem with making Draco’s character more consistent, and if Eliezer honestly feels that that should mean removing or altering his casual dehumanisation of peasants, so be it.
But I urge Eliezer to seriously ask himself, with all his strength as a rationalist, about this and any other changes: “Would this be sacrificing the quality of the narrative for the sake of making a very, very mature story superficially more marketable to children?”
And yes, I feel those apparently charged words are wholly appropriate: removing a rape reference is just a terribly superficial way of making the story ‘kid-friendly’, because it isn’t kid-friendly in much, much deeper ways. If a kid isn’t ready to know what ‘rape’ means, would you want him to read Chapter 82? Or the Bellatrix chapters? If anything the rape reference in Ch. 7 works as an excellent gatekeeper, filtering the audience before the really disturbing stuff begins to kick in.
I agree, and will be more blunt: making that change strikes me as the kind of thing a conservative Republican Christian home-schooler parent would do to their children’s books using Liquid Paper and an ink pen, rather than something that a rationalist — who understands that someday kids need to realize that the world sucks and human beings do awful things to each other — would do to his own story, which he has made abundantly clear is intended for adults.
Eliezer should simply advise those parents not to read the story to their children, unless they’re absolutely certain that the children are ready for grown-up subject matter.
Leading HPMoR’s list of kid-unfriendly points: the question “what extenuating circumstances could make it right to torture an innocent person to death” is integral to the plot. Even if everything else that can be mangled into a toned-down version is so mangled, the result will merely be more artistically compromised, not more kid-friendly.
On the other hand, the definition of kid-friendly keeps changing. The Hunger Games trilogy includes (somewhat indirect, but still quite clear) references to prostitution (both in poverty-induced despair and as a result of human trafficking), as the cherry on top of the whole “children being forced to murder each other” plot line.
I would still suggest changing the rape reference for character consistency reasons. At least, Draco shouldn’t think of it as “rape”—ISTR studies show that even real life rapists typically find some “she was asking for it” rationalization for their attitudes. MoR:Draco does an excellent job rationalizing pro-Death-eater attitudes later in the fic. A pro-rape rationalization might be different in that Harry ought to be able to see through something so appalling immediately, but from Draco’s PoV there ought to be some self-justifying framing to it.
I didn’t think it was kids that that particular removal was trying to make the story more friendly to.
This is an explicit statement that the concern about kids reading MoR is what is prompting the revision, with minor considerations about Draco’s character being secondary.
Who did you think it was trying to make the story more friendly to?
There are people in the world who can have their whole day ruined by the mention of rape. It’s why we have things like trigger-warnings.
Only just figured out my inbox =] at the time I wrote that, I was new to fanfic, and had literally never realized the negative effect rape-as-plot-device could have on some people. Just looked at the chapter on hpmor and noticed Eliezer didn’t put a trigger warning, which I find surprising.