Leading HPMoR’s list of kid-unfriendly points: the question “what extenuating circumstances could make it right to torture an innocent person to death” is integral to the plot. Even if everything else that can be mangled into a toned-down version is so mangled, the result will merely be more artistically compromised, not more kid-friendly.
On the other hand, the definition of kid-friendly keeps changing. The Hunger Games trilogy includes (somewhat indirect, but still quite clear) references to prostitution (both in poverty-induced despair and as a result of human trafficking), as the cherry on top of the whole “children being forced to murder each other” plot line.
I would still suggest changing the rape reference for character consistency reasons. At least, Draco shouldn’t think of it as “rape”—ISTR studies show that even real life rapists typically find some “she was asking for it” rationalization for their attitudes. MoR:Draco does an excellent job rationalizing pro-Death-eater attitudes later in the fic. A pro-rape rationalization might be different in that Harry ought to be able to see through something so appalling immediately, but from Draco’s PoV there ought to be some self-justifying framing to it.
Leading HPMoR’s list of kid-unfriendly points: the question “what extenuating circumstances could make it right to torture an innocent person to death” is integral to the plot. Even if everything else that can be mangled into a toned-down version is so mangled, the result will merely be more artistically compromised, not more kid-friendly.
On the other hand, the definition of kid-friendly keeps changing. The Hunger Games trilogy includes (somewhat indirect, but still quite clear) references to prostitution (both in poverty-induced despair and as a result of human trafficking), as the cherry on top of the whole “children being forced to murder each other” plot line.
I would still suggest changing the rape reference for character consistency reasons. At least, Draco shouldn’t think of it as “rape”—ISTR studies show that even real life rapists typically find some “she was asking for it” rationalization for their attitudes. MoR:Draco does an excellent job rationalizing pro-Death-eater attitudes later in the fic. A pro-rape rationalization might be different in that Harry ought to be able to see through something so appalling immediately, but from Draco’s PoV there ought to be some self-justifying framing to it.