The new paragraph should probably have the first reference to Potter by name. It should clarify that the properties of magic are what he is testing. The sentence needs a comma.
Does this mean I wouldn’t mention Harry Potter in the first paragraph?
Sorry, I meant “The new paragraph should probably have its first reference to Potter by name rather than pronoun,” or “For each paragraph, the first mention of a person should not be a pronoun referring to a previous paragraph,” not “The first mention of Potter by name in the essay should be in a later paragraph than the first.”
Does this mean I wouldn’t mention Harry Potter in the first paragraph?
Sorry, I meant “The new paragraph should probably have its first reference to Potter by name rather than pronoun,” or “For each paragraph, the first mention of a person should not be a pronoun referring to a previous paragraph,” not “The first mention of Potter by name in the essay should be in a later paragraph than the first.”