I’ve tried using a different method for r1 to generate flash fiction: one sentence at a time. If a human writer wouldn’t write out a flash fiction story in one message, then AI shouldn’t, either. Here’s a result:
She clocked in at 6AM, categorizing discards by residue: toothpaste-crusted wedding bands in Tier 4, melatonin vials from red-eyes in Tier 7, a child’s sock curled around her sister’s garnet earring (missing since the November her calls went unanswered).
Room 312’s newlyweds left forensic poetry—dental floss strung bedpost to minibar, aspirin dust tracing slammed door trajectories. She logged these under Domestic Erosion, Subcategory: Honeymoon Phase.
Room 214’s grid collapsed at the gel insoles—mint-green, bunioned, size 6 like her sister’s. The prescription (sertraline, 50mg) was dated three days after their last fight. She filed it under Unfinished Conversations, though the label peeled halfway.
The businessman in 603 prayed, she’d assumed. But his trash betrayed her grids: glucose tabs bisecting train tickets, bloodied test strips where kneelers should’ve dented carpet. Her scrubbing split her cuticles, crimson streaking the sink’s rust.
At dawn, she assembled her relics—unopened bills, an expired birth control foil (2019’s voicemail: static, then dial tone), lint rollers furred with 603’s hair. Each strand vibrated middle C, the note her sister had looped on the piano the night she vanished.
Aspirin dust still gritted her palms. She pressed them to the window as dawn blued the glass—that bleached hue he’d called “motel dusk” while wrestling their tent zipper, his breath hot and futile against her neck.
I think that this still has some imperfections, but I find that this method at least gives you an entirely different set of problems compared to the cliché output you describe.
“Write like you talk” depends on which language you are talking about.
Take Arabic. Written Arabic and spoken Arabic has diverged enormously compared to written English and spoken English. Modern Standard Arabic (MSA) is the formal written language for books, newspapers, speeches etc. But no sane person speaks it. There are a lot of spoken dialects (like Egyptian, Levantine, Gulf Arabic, etc.). A speaker of different dialects may not understand other dialects or MSA, because all the vocabulary and grammar is different, which isn’t usually the case in English.
Written and spoken English are similar to each other compared to most other languages.