FWIW, I don’t think it works at all. You have totally failed to mimic the SCP style or Lovecraftian ethos, the style it’s written in is not great in its own right, and it comes off as highly didactic ax-grinding. I couldn’t finish reading it.
What do you think avout the core concept of Explanatory Fog, that is secrecy leading to distrust leading to a viral mental breakdown? Possibly leading eventually to the end of civlisation. Happy to rework it if the core concept is good.
I’m thinking about an incorporating this into a longer story about Star Fog, where Star Fog is Explanatory Fog that convinces intelligent life to believe in it because it will expand the number of intelligent beings.
Wrote what I think is a philosophically interesting story in the SCP universe
https://monogr.ph/6757024eb3365351cc04e76
FWIW, I don’t think it works at all. You have totally failed to mimic the SCP style or Lovecraftian ethos, the style it’s written in is not great in its own right, and it comes off as highly didactic ax-grinding. I couldn’t finish reading it.
What do you think avout the core concept of Explanatory Fog, that is secrecy leading to distrust leading to a viral mental breakdown? Possibly leading eventually to the end of civlisation. Happy to rework it if the core concept is good.
I’m thinking about an incorporating this into a longer story about Star Fog, where Star Fog is Explanatory Fog that convinces intelligent life to believe in it because it will expand the number of intelligent beings.