FWIW, I don’t think it works at all. You have totally failed to mimic the SCP style or Lovecraftian ethos, the style it’s written in is not great in its own right, and it comes off as highly didactic ax-grinding. I couldn’t finish reading it.
What do you think avout the core concept of Explanatory Fog, that is secrecy leading to distrust leading to a viral mental breakdown? Possibly leading eventually to the end of civlisation. Happy to rework it if the core concept is good.
FWIW, I don’t think it works at all. You have totally failed to mimic the SCP style or Lovecraftian ethos, the style it’s written in is not great in its own right, and it comes off as highly didactic ax-grinding. I couldn’t finish reading it.
What do you think avout the core concept of Explanatory Fog, that is secrecy leading to distrust leading to a viral mental breakdown? Possibly leading eventually to the end of civlisation. Happy to rework it if the core concept is good.