Mild organizational feedback: I appreciate having the “previously” section to show how things are building. However, as it grows longer (and maybe even when it is short), it’s a bit hard to parse (both hard to parse-as-separate-from-the-article and hard-to-parse-generally). Maybe try doing it as a bullet list?
Curious to hear others thoughts on that, I feel like a bullet list would take up too much space. Note that I don’t expect to have a list this long very often, and long term when we get sequences working right we can move to using that.
Hmm. I was actually thinking to make it shorter as well as conceptually easier to grok. (fake edit: nvm I just realized we were talking about separate things)
Basically I had no idea when the post actually began, and did some weird skimming back and forth. Compare:
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Epistemic Status: Several months of experimentation
Previously: Choices are Bad, Choices Are Really Bad, Complexity Is Bad, Play in Easy Mode, Play in Hard Mode, Out to Get You, Slack
For More Thoughts After: Sabbath Commentary
Alternate Take (Endorsed): Sabbath Hard and Go Home.
Slack is life. It is under attack. We must fight for it.
Choices Are Bad. Really Bad. We need a break.
Complexity Is Bad. We need a break.
Work is exhausting. We need a break.
Relaxation is hard. Our attempts fail or backfire.
The modern world is Out to Get You. We need a break.
We need time for ourselves. Time that is truly our own.
Without setting aside such time, that won’t happen. Even when you take time, you’ll be continuously choosing to take time, and… well, whoops.
Modern life made the problem worse, but the problem is ancient. The ancients had an answer.
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vs. something like…
(I realized this involves a bit more editing than I thought at first glance. What I thought was your “previously” section was… probably intended to be the beginning of the piece, but I’m not sure. It feels like you repeat your “previously” thing twice.)
((Also note that recently, Post styling was modified so that bullet points are a bit closer together, but I think comment bullet points are still a full space apart so this isn’t as nicely condensed as I wanted))
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Epistemic Status: Several months of experimentation
The Story So Far:
For More Thoughts After: Sabbath Commentary
Alternate Take (Endorsed): Sabbath Hard and Go Home.
Slack is life. It is under attack. We must fight for it.
Choices Are Bad. Really Bad. We need a break.
Complexity Is Bad. We need a break.
Work is exhausting. We need a break.
Relaxation is hard. Our attempts fail or backfire.
The modern world is Out to Get You.
We need time for ourselves. Time that is truly our own.
Without setting aside such time, that won’t happen. Even when you take time, you’ll be continuously choosing to take time, and… well, whoops.
Modern life made the problem worse, but the problem is ancient. The ancients had an answer....
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Or something like that (removing the separate “previously” section since it’s mostly redundant with the first 10 lines.
I realize now that bullet points probably is pointing at a different thing than your intent, but if so, I think that intent didn’t quite work for me the way it was supposed to.
Ah. That’s not bad. I did notice that I was sort of doing the thing twice, and was a little sad about it. This suggests a good way to reconcile things and I will consider editing to that version rather than sticking with the traditional ‘previously’ labeling.
Mild organizational feedback: I appreciate having the “previously” section to show how things are building. However, as it grows longer (and maybe even when it is short), it’s a bit hard to parse (both hard to parse-as-separate-from-the-article and hard-to-parse-generally). Maybe try doing it as a bullet list?
Curious to hear others thoughts on that, I feel like a bullet list would take up too much space. Note that I don’t expect to have a list this long very often, and long term when we get sequences working right we can move to using that.
Hmm. I was actually thinking to make it shorter as well as conceptually easier to grok. (fake edit: nvm I just realized we were talking about separate things)
Basically I had no idea when the post actually began, and did some weird skimming back and forth. Compare:
***
Epistemic Status: Several months of experimentation
Previously: Choices are Bad, Choices Are Really Bad, Complexity Is Bad, Play in Easy Mode, Play in Hard Mode, Out to Get You, Slack
For More Thoughts After: Sabbath Commentary
Alternate Take (Endorsed): Sabbath Hard and Go Home.
Slack is life. It is under attack. We must fight for it.
Choices Are Bad. Really Bad. We need a break.
Complexity Is Bad. We need a break.
Work is exhausting. We need a break.
Relaxation is hard. Our attempts fail or backfire.
The modern world is Out to Get You. We need a break.
We need time for ourselves. Time that is truly our own.
Without setting aside such time, that won’t happen. Even when you take time, you’ll be continuously choosing to take time, and… well, whoops.
Modern life made the problem worse, but the problem is ancient. The ancients had an answer.
***
vs. something like…
(I realized this involves a bit more editing than I thought at first glance. What I thought was your “previously” section was… probably intended to be the beginning of the piece, but I’m not sure. It feels like you repeat your “previously” thing twice.)
((Also note that recently, Post styling was modified so that bullet points are a bit closer together, but I think comment bullet points are still a full space apart so this isn’t as nicely condensed as I wanted))
***
Epistemic Status: Several months of experimentation
The Story So Far:
For More Thoughts After: Sabbath Commentary
Alternate Take (Endorsed): Sabbath Hard and Go Home.
Slack is life. It is under attack. We must fight for it.
Choices Are Bad. Really Bad. We need a break.
Complexity Is Bad. We need a break.
Work is exhausting. We need a break.
Relaxation is hard. Our attempts fail or backfire.
The modern world is Out to Get You.
We need time for ourselves. Time that is truly our own.
Without setting aside such time, that won’t happen. Even when you take time, you’ll be continuously choosing to take time, and… well, whoops.
Modern life made the problem worse, but the problem is ancient. The ancients had an answer....
***
Or something like that (removing the separate “previously” section since it’s mostly redundant with the first 10 lines.
I realize now that bullet points probably is pointing at a different thing than your intent, but if so, I think that intent didn’t quite work for me the way it was supposed to.
Ah. That’s not bad. I did notice that I was sort of doing the thing twice, and was a little sad about it. This suggests a good way to reconcile things and I will consider editing to that version rather than sticking with the traditional ‘previously’ labeling.