I enjoy reading any kind of cogent fiction on LW, but this one is a bit too undeveloped for my tastes. Perhaps be more explicit about what Myrkina sees in the discussion which relates to our world? You don’t have to always spell earth-shattering revelations out loud (in fact it’s best to let the readers reach the correct conclusion by themselves imo), but there needs to be enough narrative tension to make the conclusion inevitable; as it stands, it feels like I can just meh my way out of thinking more than 30s on what the revelation might be, the same way Tralith does.
I enjoy reading any kind of cogent fiction on LW, but this one is a bit too undeveloped for my tastes. Perhaps be more explicit about what Myrkina sees in the discussion which relates to our world?
You don’t have to always spell earth-shattering revelations out loud (in fact it’s best to let the readers reach the correct conclusion by themselves imo), but there needs to be enough narrative tension to make the conclusion inevitable; as it stands, it feels like I can just meh my way out of thinking more than 30s on what the revelation might be, the same way Tralith does.
I’m glad you found one of the characters sympathetic. Personally I feel strongly both ways, which is why I wrote the story the way that I did.