Yes, though it would be better-written if I’d instead trained in writing and it would be more useful if I’d been able to link to empirical research demonstrating the effects I just baldly asserted. My training in philosophy did seem to make me better at sounding like I know what I’m talking about when I tell other people what to do.
My training in philosophy did seem to make me better at sounding like I know what I’m talking about when I tell other people what to do.
If you can describe the methods of sounding authoritative, I think it would be very valuable, whether as a contribution to understanding the dark arts or as a tool for increasing motivation. (Or does is it a skill of sounding right which doesn’t actually motivate people?)
I’ve been wondering about the techniques ever since I noticed that Heinlein had a talent for sounding right.
I honestly don’t know how you could’ve written it better
Thanks, but I can describe at least in general terms how I could have written it better...
I could have arranged the words so that they form pleasing patterns when spoken aloud. The first sentence uses the word “that” which might be confusing to some readers, especially seeing the comment permalink without context—I could have spelled out briefly what the subject was. The rhetorical “However” at the beginning of the second “paragraph” serves a useful stylistic purpose, but will turn off some readers who think it’s improper. Ditto with making “paragraphs” of fewer than two sentences. “Different people with different ways of thinking” places undue emphasis on the repeated word “different”, and it would probably be better to use more specific words in each case. I could have taken into consideration what the purpose of writing that comment was and tailored the rhetoric specifically to that purpose—if I wanted to convince someone not to major in philosophy, there are some extra facts about philosophy I could have dug up to make it hit home harder. A superintelligence might be able to create a basilisk-string that would insert the knowledge directly into your mind.
And those ideas are without significant training or practice as a writer. If I couldn’t do better with training, then there’s significant low-hanging fruit out there for improving writer training.
Yes, though it would be better-written if I’d instead trained in writing and it would be more useful if I’d been able to link to empirical research demonstrating the effects I just baldly asserted. My training in philosophy did seem to make me better at sounding like I know what I’m talking about when I tell other people what to do.
If you can describe the methods of sounding authoritative, I think it would be very valuable, whether as a contribution to understanding the dark arts or as a tool for increasing motivation. (Or does is it a skill of sounding right which doesn’t actually motivate people?)
I’ve been wondering about the techniques ever since I noticed that Heinlein had a talent for sounding right.
Have you tried listening to the Onion Talks?
I hadn’t heard of them, but I don’t think the one you linked to is a very good example of sounding authoritative.
I profess to have a skill at sounding right, but I did not learn a lot of theory.
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Thanks, but I can describe at least in general terms how I could have written it better...
I could have arranged the words so that they form pleasing patterns when spoken aloud. The first sentence uses the word “that” which might be confusing to some readers, especially seeing the comment permalink without context—I could have spelled out briefly what the subject was. The rhetorical “However” at the beginning of the second “paragraph” serves a useful stylistic purpose, but will turn off some readers who think it’s improper. Ditto with making “paragraphs” of fewer than two sentences. “Different people with different ways of thinking” places undue emphasis on the repeated word “different”, and it would probably be better to use more specific words in each case. I could have taken into consideration what the purpose of writing that comment was and tailored the rhetoric specifically to that purpose—if I wanted to convince someone not to major in philosophy, there are some extra facts about philosophy I could have dug up to make it hit home harder. A superintelligence might be able to create a basilisk-string that would insert the knowledge directly into your mind.
And those ideas are without significant training or practice as a writer. If I couldn’t do better with training, then there’s significant low-hanging fruit out there for improving writer training.