I do like reading suggestions, though I usually don’t take them once a story is finished—mainly because I can’t get back into a story and grasp its gestalt well enough to revise it, without doing a big revision. I think I will use the phrase “why not accept a mere permutation of the same event?” sometime—there are probably many situations where that could be surprising and insightful.
Getting into what “I” was thinking at that moment is a can of worms… you could go in a lot of directions, such as how his loss of Julia might have caused his refusal to join a collective.
I do like reading suggestions, though I usually don’t take them once a story is finished—mainly because I can’t get back into a story and grasp its gestalt well enough to revise it, without doing a big revision. I think I will use the phrase “why not accept a mere permutation of the same event?” sometime—there are probably many situations where that could be surprising and insightful.
Getting into what “I” was thinking at that moment is a can of worms… you could go in a lot of directions, such as how his loss of Julia might have caused his refusal to join a collective.