I added a Quick Reference Section which contains your outline. I suspect your other changes are good too, but I dont want to copy them in without checking to make sure you didnt change something improtant. (Maybe it would be good if you had some way to communicate the difference or the most improtant changes quickly.)
I also changed the causal basketball example.
On a meta note, I wonder how we can build a system of collaboration more directly into Less Wrong. I think this would be very useful. (I may be biased as someone who has an unusually high gap between ability to generate good ideas and ability to write.)
I actually didn’t make many other changes (originally I was planning to rewrite large chunks of it to reflect my own understanding. Instead, the primary thing ended up being “what happens when I simply convert a post with 18px font into a comment with 13px font). I trimmed out a few words that seemed excessive, but this was more an exercise in “what if LW posts looked more like comments?” or something.
That said, if you think it’d be useful I’d be up for making another more serious attempt to trim it down and/or make it more readable—this is something I could imagine turning out to be a valuable thing for me to spend time on on a regular basis.
I am very happy you did this!
I added a Quick Reference Section which contains your outline. I suspect your other changes are good too, but I dont want to copy them in without checking to make sure you didnt change something improtant. (Maybe it would be good if you had some way to communicate the difference or the most improtant changes quickly.)
I also changed the causal basketball example.
On a meta note, I wonder how we can build a system of collaboration more directly into Less Wrong. I think this would be very useful. (I may be biased as someone who has an unusually high gap between ability to generate good ideas and ability to write.)
I actually didn’t make many other changes (originally I was planning to rewrite large chunks of it to reflect my own understanding. Instead, the primary thing ended up being “what happens when I simply convert a post with 18px font into a comment with 13px font). I trimmed out a few words that seemed excessive, but this was more an exercise in “what if LW posts looked more like comments?” or something.
That said, if you think it’d be useful I’d be up for making another more serious attempt to trim it down and/or make it more readable—this is something I could imagine turning out to be a valuable thing for me to spend time on on a regular basis.