I’m greatfull for your helpful comments. I will surely add more citations (I have to do that anyway for the academics).
I need you to tell me if the structure of the argument works rhetorically. My struggle is in arranging the order of points, paragraphs and sentences such that the reader can connect each of them to my broader thesis. Historically, I tend to throw knowledge at the reader. The reader is left thinking “why did I learn this fact? how do they fit together? what was the point again”. If you assume I have a good citation for each sentence, would you actually understand the conclusion?
I’m greatfull for your helpful comments. I will surely add more citations (I have to do that anyway for the academics).
I need you to tell me if the structure of the argument works rhetorically. My struggle is in arranging the order of points, paragraphs and sentences such that the reader can connect each of them to my broader thesis. Historically, I tend to throw knowledge at the reader. The reader is left thinking “why did I learn this fact? how do they fit together? what was the point again”. If you assume I have a good citation for each sentence, would you actually understand the conclusion?
I think you’re fine on that front, or at least plenty good enough for me.