Needs more evidence. Like, citations and stuff. I’m not downvoting, I think −4 is sufficient given that you explicitly said it wasn’t final and you wanted feedback.
It seems like, to actually make your point, you may need to model the amount of good/harm particular sets of beliefs cause vs how hard it is to change the minds of the adherents; I’d actually expect there to be differences among different breeds of christianity. It seems like a difficult task just to come up with reasonably objective numbers for both of those things, and of course the measurement of good/harm depends on the value system from which the evaluation is done.
I agree with the person that said your individual story would probably make for a better piece to start out with.
(side note: I was going to predict that you were late teens based on the writing quality of this post, so I skimmed your other comments. My impression was that your other comments are 1-4 standard deviations above this piece in quality, which made me doubt my prediction, at least until I found a comment where you disclosed your age. My guess is that you put much more effort per word into your comments than you managed for this long piece.)
Needs more evidence. Like, citations and stuff. I’m not downvoting, I think −4 is sufficient given that you explicitly said it wasn’t final and you wanted feedback.
It seems like, to actually make your point, you may need to model the amount of good/harm particular sets of beliefs cause vs how hard it is to change the minds of the adherents; I’d actually expect there to be differences among different breeds of christianity. It seems like a difficult task just to come up with reasonably objective numbers for both of those things, and of course the measurement of good/harm depends on the value system from which the evaluation is done.
I agree with the person that said your individual story would probably make for a better piece to start out with.
(side note: I was going to predict that you were late teens based on the writing quality of this post, so I skimmed your other comments. My impression was that your other comments are 1-4 standard deviations above this piece in quality, which made me doubt my prediction, at least until I found a comment where you disclosed your age. My guess is that you put much more effort per word into your comments than you managed for this long piece.)