I just wanted to say that Chapter 55 made me go from “the luminosity fic is good” to “omg I need to get people to read the luminosity fic!”.
One rule for emotionally compelling stories is “make a character you love and then torture them” and Alicorn has done that very very well. At this point I don’t know if the story can have any kind of happy ending, but the story has transitioned from one where the default happy ending can pretty much be assumed (because most stories have so much wish fulfillment), to one of the rare stories where implacable reality is described by the author in the way you would expect an implacable reality to work.
And I love the way it is the “rationalist character” who, in retrospect, was sort of “blithely rational” who got hurt. This is a lesson that is meaningful for me, helping me to emotionally internalize the real risks of experimenting with one’s life, rather than a lesson that I can imagine is meaningful for normal Harry Potter fanfic readers. When the pack was expanding and things were clearly getting out of control I had a bad feeling and wanted to warn Bella, but I didn’t really expect negative outcomes.
I just wanted to say that Chapter 55 made me go from “the luminosity fic is good” to “omg I need to get people to read the luminosity fic!”.
One rule for emotionally compelling stories is “make a character you love and then torture them” and Alicorn has done that very very well. At this point I don’t know if the story can have any kind of happy ending, but the story has transitioned from one where the default happy ending can pretty much be assumed (because most stories have so much wish fulfillment), to one of the rare stories where implacable reality is described by the author in the way you would expect an implacable reality to work.
And I love the way it is the “rationalist character” who, in retrospect, was sort of “blithely rational” who got hurt. This is a lesson that is meaningful for me, helping me to emotionally internalize the real risks of experimenting with one’s life, rather than a lesson that I can imagine is meaningful for normal Harry Potter fanfic readers. When the pack was expanding and things were clearly getting out of control I had a bad feeling and wanted to warn Bella, but I didn’t really expect negative outcomes.
Thank you, Alicorn, for writing this.