I’d like to provide a data point in a different direction from siduri—I too liked that section, but I liked it because it turned a solely sensory description into character development as well. Jane’s inkblot presence didn’t serve to highlight the description of the room, the room’s description highlighted Jane’s character. Elspeth later wonders why Jane even exists; Jane is like an ink blot on Elspeth’s view of the world. That is an excellent description that fleshes out Jane in my mind. I don’t like descriptions of places and people for their own sake. Describing the assembly hall or Jacob’s room is only desirable (for me as a reader of your work, not in general) if it tells us something important about Chelsea or Jacob, or pushes the plot forwards.
I’d like to provide a data point in a different direction from siduri—I too liked that section, but I liked it because it turned a solely sensory description into character development as well. Jane’s inkblot presence didn’t serve to highlight the description of the room, the room’s description highlighted Jane’s character. Elspeth later wonders why Jane even exists; Jane is like an ink blot on Elspeth’s view of the world. That is an excellent description that fleshes out Jane in my mind. I don’t like descriptions of places and people for their own sake. Describing the assembly hall or Jacob’s room is only desirable (for me as a reader of your work, not in general) if it tells us something important about Chelsea or Jacob, or pushes the plot forwards.