Two Points:
1) Your fanfic made me read the original stuff. Interestingly, for me, somehow the differences felt larger than in Eliezers fanfic, although I do realise that your fic has fewer points of departure than Eliezers. Might be because I hadn’t read books from the Potter series in quite som time.
A question though: I’m not far into the series, but I thought that at first, you only wanted the protagonist, Bella, to act more rational. However, the original!Bella seems to share luminous!Bellas wish to become a vampire, and, while less organized, advances the same arguments as luminous!Bella. Yet, luminous!Bella manages to convice Edward whle original!Bella doesn’t. I admit that I didn’t read your work as attentively as I might have read a paperback, so I might have missed the reason for that. Could you perhaps point me to it?
2) What’s the reason again for Chelsea not being the leader of the Volterra coven? Her power is terrifying, and seems to be really dangerous if applied intelligently. More so than Aro’s.
1) Canon!Edward remains convinced until book 4 that turning Bella will constitute destroying her soul. Canon!Bella’s attempts at addressing this are silly (arguing mostly from her belief that Edward must have a soul even though he’s a vampire, on the grounds that he is wonderful and wonderful persons have souls). Luminous!Bella attacks this soul-related premise more directly, making the matter of turning a dichotomy between immortal life and Cessation Of Existence. And—while Edward might have otherwise changed his mind after agreeing—she makes the Volturi aware of her existence and interested in her progress significantly earlier than Canon!Bella did, meaning that it comes down to turning her or letting the Volturi punish her and the coven.
2) It’s canon. I justify it by her simply not being interested in running the show; she just wants to be an indispensable member of the winning team.
My guess would be that Chelsea doesn’t want to be quite so much a target at the top, preferring the role of a puppet master… (Well, at least in Luminosity, in canon it’s probably just not well thought out ;] )
Two Points: 1) Your fanfic made me read the original stuff. Interestingly, for me, somehow the differences felt larger than in Eliezers fanfic, although I do realise that your fic has fewer points of departure than Eliezers. Might be because I hadn’t read books from the Potter series in quite som time. A question though: I’m not far into the series, but I thought that at first, you only wanted the protagonist, Bella, to act more rational. However, the original!Bella seems to share luminous!Bellas wish to become a vampire, and, while less organized, advances the same arguments as luminous!Bella. Yet, luminous!Bella manages to convice Edward whle original!Bella doesn’t. I admit that I didn’t read your work as attentively as I might have read a paperback, so I might have missed the reason for that. Could you perhaps point me to it?
2) What’s the reason again for Chelsea not being the leader of the Volterra coven? Her power is terrifying, and seems to be really dangerous if applied intelligently. More so than Aro’s.
1) Canon!Edward remains convinced until book 4 that turning Bella will constitute destroying her soul. Canon!Bella’s attempts at addressing this are silly (arguing mostly from her belief that Edward must have a soul even though he’s a vampire, on the grounds that he is wonderful and wonderful persons have souls). Luminous!Bella attacks this soul-related premise more directly, making the matter of turning a dichotomy between immortal life and Cessation Of Existence. And—while Edward might have otherwise changed his mind after agreeing—she makes the Volturi aware of her existence and interested in her progress significantly earlier than Canon!Bella did, meaning that it comes down to turning her or letting the Volturi punish her and the coven.
2) It’s canon. I justify it by her simply not being interested in running the show; she just wants to be an indispensable member of the winning team.
My guess would be that Chelsea doesn’t want to be quite so much a target at the top, preferring the role of a puppet master… (Well, at least in Luminosity, in canon it’s probably just not well thought out ;] )