‘Something precious inside Harry withered like dry grass.’ also has the advantage of brevity. It now reads to me like a good sentence.
Also has an interesting implication, which may or not be what Eliezer wants—individual blades of grass die, but grass regrows.
‘Something precious inside Harry withered like dry grass.’ also has the advantage of brevity. It now reads to me like a good sentence.
Also has an interesting implication, which may or not be what Eliezer wants—individual blades of grass die, but grass regrows.