“I have a question,” said Tanya’s voice from Siobhan’s end of the phone connection. It was quiet enough to be difficult to pick out, so I pulled out and dialed in.
And
“Got—” Alice started muttering names, and I dialed my own phone into the conversation so I didn’t have to listen to everything secondhand through my mother’s.
I got the impression both of those voices were being transmitted by Siobhan’s phone
Aha. I hallucinated writing a clause in the paragraph where Jake wakes up indicating that Elspeth closed her phone to have her hands free to deal with him, but it isn’t actually there. Editing it in now. Thanks.
Fixed the typo. Regarding dialing, can you be more specific about where you see the redundancy (give me a string to search for maybe?)
The string “dial” turns up two matches in 39:
And
I got the impression both of those voices were being transmitted by Siobhan’s phone
Aha. I hallucinated writing a clause in the paragraph where Jake wakes up indicating that Elspeth closed her phone to have her hands free to deal with him, but it isn’t actually there. Editing it in now. Thanks.