No; when reading this I had no idea that you had (apparently) added the modified quote specifically in response to the grandparent, and thus I read the grandparent as an objection to the second version. And the objection stands.
(In fact, the grandparent actually says “I would not agree even with the second statement”, so now I’m confused: what did you change?)
No; when reading this I had no idea that you had (apparently) added the modified quote specifically in response to the grandparent, and thus I read the grandparent as an objection to the second version. And the objection stands.
(In fact, the grandparent actually says “I would not agree even with the second statement”, so now I’m confused: what did you change?)
Better?
For anyone having trouble following, it is a question as to whether this edit makes things clearer.
To which I would answer (having seen an earlier version): yes, better.