You don’t think there could be a some kind of talent that is more directly associated with luminosity than being unreadable? Bella’s thoughts, motives and feelings do not appear to be at all hard to read by conventional means. In fact, she seems to make a more than typical effort to make herself transparent.
Something Bella does seem to be good at is analysing the future impact of her decisions. That could lead to a more self-focussed version of Alice’s talent. You could quite reasonably just palm off Bella’s ability to Alice and use a modified version of Alice’s talent for a fanfiction protagonist. Of course, if Bella’s ability actually was closely related to luminosity it would defeat a lot of the point of the story. If she was luminous via super-power then we wouldn’t be able to watch her putting in the effort to be self aware and rational manually. She would probably also experience a similar effect to Edward. He lost his ability to empathise effectively when he became a mind reader.
I was implying that she was super-powered via luminosity, which I don’t think informs the same concern.
In that quote I was referring to my own suggestion.
Do you suggest that Bella should just not be given any witch power at all? (As a matter of personal preference I tend to like the protagonist to be given something apart from ‘not acting like a moron’, assuming the world is one that tends to include superpowers.)
I think the general principle is that the protagonist shouldn’t have more than maybe one important advantage over most other characters. If most of the characters in the fic are non-morons, or superpowered, then that one’s free. Luminous!Bella gets to be a vampire “for free” because she mostly interacts with other vampires; Rational!Harry gets to be rational because everyone else in MoR is smart too; but for Bella to be both luminous and a witch, without most of the other main characters in the fic being one or the other as well, wants a single cause.
Alice and Edward are the most significant Cullens, and have witchy powers. The antagonists include a large proportion of witches. Does this get Bella a witchcraft pass? Particularly since her power is one that only works in the context of other powers—it would simply not do anything in the absence of other witches.
Bella definitely gets a witchcraft pass… her power is boring. It’s mostly there because female protagonists in romantic vampire fantasies usually get an immunity to the mind tricks of their vampire suitors. Basically so it gives them an excuse to be in a thrall that can only be explained by overwhelming sexual dominance.
I hadn’t thought about it like that, but on reflection, I think that it does qualify for the pass. It helps, too, that it’s not a general immunity to witches—she’s still vulnerable to Alice and Jasper, for example.
What about her control as a newborn? Does that count?
Her control as a newborn is her luminosity, so far as I can determine—she has a set of generalized techniques to influence her desires and emotions, and takes advantage of the specific knowledge which she acquired from the others in her coven to focus these techniques on the precise alterations she needs to be a well-controlled newborn.
No, she had control in canon too. Luminous!Bella is only a touch more self-possessed. My explanation—maybe I haven’t played it up enough? - is that if you know something about what to expect, you will do a better job of handling it. This is borne out by Carlisle being immune to wanting to nom humans, and having known vampires existed before he was bitten. The others have more trouble, and the one who has the most trouble is Jasper—who also was turned the most unexpectedly and traumatically, while the others at least expected to die of injury/sickness or had amnesia.
No, she had control in canon too. Luminous!Bella is only a touch more self-possessed. My explanation—maybe I haven’t played it up enough? - is that if you know something about what to expect, you will do a better job of handling it.
It surely also helps that luminous!Bella has been spending years practising emotional control!
You don’t think there could be a some kind of talent that is more directly associated with luminosity than being unreadable? Bella’s thoughts, motives and feelings do not appear to be at all hard to read by conventional means. In fact, she seems to make a more than typical effort to make herself transparent.
Something Bella does seem to be good at is analysing the future impact of her decisions. That could lead to a more self-focussed version of Alice’s talent. You could quite reasonably just palm off Bella’s ability to Alice and use a modified version of Alice’s talent for a fanfiction protagonist. Of course, if Bella’s ability actually was closely related to luminosity it would defeat a lot of the point of the story. If she was luminous via super-power then we wouldn’t be able to watch her putting in the effort to be self aware and rational manually. She would probably also experience a similar effect to Edward. He lost his ability to empathise effectively when he became a mind reader.
I was implying that she was super-powered via luminosity, which I don’t think informs the same concern.
In that quote I was referring to my own suggestion.
Do you suggest that Bella should just not be given any witch power at all? (As a matter of personal preference I tend to like the protagonist to be given something apart from ‘not acting like a moron’, assuming the world is one that tends to include superpowers.)
I think the general principle is that the protagonist shouldn’t have more than maybe one important advantage over most other characters. If most of the characters in the fic are non-morons, or superpowered, then that one’s free. Luminous!Bella gets to be a vampire “for free” because she mostly interacts with other vampires; Rational!Harry gets to be rational because everyone else in MoR is smart too; but for Bella to be both luminous and a witch, without most of the other main characters in the fic being one or the other as well, wants a single cause.
Alice and Edward are the most significant Cullens, and have witchy powers. The antagonists include a large proportion of witches. Does this get Bella a witchcraft pass? Particularly since her power is one that only works in the context of other powers—it would simply not do anything in the absence of other witches.
Bella definitely gets a witchcraft pass… her power is boring. It’s mostly there because female protagonists in romantic vampire fantasies usually get an immunity to the mind tricks of their vampire suitors. Basically so it gives them an excuse to be in a thrall that can only be explained by overwhelming sexual dominance.
I hadn’t thought about it like that, but on reflection, I think that it does qualify for the pass. It helps, too, that it’s not a general immunity to witches—she’s still vulnerable to Alice and Jasper, for example.
What about her control as a newborn? Does that count?
Her control as a newborn is her luminosity, so far as I can determine—she has a set of generalized techniques to influence her desires and emotions, and takes advantage of the specific knowledge which she acquired from the others in her coven to focus these techniques on the precise alterations she needs to be a well-controlled newborn.
No, she had control in canon too. Luminous!Bella is only a touch more self-possessed. My explanation—maybe I haven’t played it up enough? - is that if you know something about what to expect, you will do a better job of handling it. This is borne out by Carlisle being immune to wanting to nom humans, and having known vampires existed before he was bitten. The others have more trouble, and the one who has the most trouble is Jasper—who also was turned the most unexpectedly and traumatically, while the others at least expected to die of injury/sickness or had amnesia.
It surely also helps that luminous!Bella has been spending years practising emotional control!
No, you’re right, that’s in there. I’m not familiar with the source material, I suppose.
You’re right. Her control falls squarely under the single-cause rule.