I’m not sure that I’m necessarily advocating taking the other chemical names out. After all, they play a necessary role right at the very end, and I don’t know how that would work without all the previous use.
I didn’t mean to imply that there was any doubt that pollution was a central topic! That would be hard to miss. But it’s not so clear what you’re trying to say about it. (Or whether you’re neutrally refraining from saying anything in particular, and just showing it in its natural habitat, as it were.) Perhaps if I were less ignorant that last parenthesis would tell me a clearer story. (Though I guess googling the chemical names would probably have sufficed.)
I’m not sure that I’m necessarily advocating taking the other chemical names out. After all, they play a necessary role right at the very end, and I don’t know how that would work without all the previous use.
I didn’t mean to imply that there was any doubt that pollution was a central topic! That would be hard to miss. But it’s not so clear what you’re trying to say about it. (Or whether you’re neutrally refraining from saying anything in particular, and just showing it in its natural habitat, as it were.) Perhaps if I were less ignorant that last parenthesis would tell me a clearer story. (Though I guess googling the chemical names would probably have sufficed.)