That would help, but the introduction needs work too.
It feels like you have two distinct posts awkwardly glued together: one pointing out that cryonics is no more selfish than ordinary selfish expenditures, and another pointing out that it is not the most efficient altruistic use of your money. I’m not sure how they might be better integrated.
Would this issue be resolved to your satisfaction if I changed the title of the article to “against altruistic cryonics...” ?
That would help, but the introduction needs work too.
It feels like you have two distinct posts awkwardly glued together: one pointing out that cryonics is no more selfish than ordinary selfish expenditures, and another pointing out that it is not the most efficient altruistic use of your money. I’m not sure how they might be better integrated.
If that’s your point, then it would certainly help to make it clear in the heading.
Does wanting to save those close to you count as altrusim?