I’m not really sure, sorry. It’s much easier for me to notice how the story is making me feel than actually working out why, or how to change it… I guess that’s why writing books is harder than reading them 😂
Anyway not meaning to criticize here—you’ve done a fair better job than I could have. Just trying to help here a bit.
I was just checking if you might have introspective knowledge about how you’d respond to that :P, also I think I may have been trying to demonstrate that I am in fact paying attention to and thinking about the criticisms—the important thing is in fact that X didn’t work for you (and didn’t work for several other people in the same way). Isn’t there some saying about product development that when the customer tells you that it isn’t working, they are right. When they tell you how to fix it, they have no idea what they usually don’t know what they are talking about?
The too preachy feeling definitely is something to soften out and try fiddling with.
I’m not really sure, sorry. It’s much easier for me to notice how the story is making me feel than actually working out why, or how to change it… I guess that’s why writing books is harder than reading them 😂
Anyway not meaning to criticize here—you’ve done a fair better job than I could have. Just trying to help here a bit.
I was just checking if you might have introspective knowledge about how you’d respond to that :P, also I think I may have been trying to demonstrate that I am in fact paying attention to and thinking about the criticisms—the important thing is in fact that X didn’t work for you (and didn’t work for several other people in the same way). Isn’t there some saying about product development that when the customer tells you that it isn’t working, they are right. When they tell you how to fix it, they have no idea what they usually don’t know what they are talking about?
The too preachy feeling definitely is something to soften out and try fiddling with.