Communal Composition

I’ve considered in the past setting up an app of some kind to allow communal composition of music. It just now occurred to me to try a weaker version of the same idea here.

This is an unfinished, unpolished poem that I nonetheless feel has some good parts.

I submit it for criticism, or better yet, to be cut, altered, added to, or used as fuel or parts for another work.

Or if you want to go meta, do you have any ideas for more effectively pulling off something like communal composition?

And passing the sacred store by

Their good-luck charms I do not buy.

But if you care so much, you may surely try.

Freedom for you and for me will survive.

Call me names, they well may stick

But they’ll only last if I stay quick

And if I die, what do I care

Oh, to die, well I do care.

But who to turn to, where to look

I’ve purchased every holy book

Their costly knowledge cost me time

Which with my will is all that’s mine.

And if you feel so calmly sure,

I know others as much and more,

They gave their lives as you’d give yours

But what did they give theirs for? (blow themselves up for?)

Despite the blight of ignorance

Shall I praise the courageous dance?

But honestly I don’t.

And to die for you, is just a drop,

An endless ocean you just bought.

But proud were I if you would sell

For another your ticket out of hell.

And otherwise, what of it, then?

You ducked your praise for a rich stipend

Of so much more farther down the road