I think the thing that made it seem like a draft is the missing “I went” at the beginning of the article. I also noticed illustrate is misspelled, at a quick glance.
The opening was deliberate—it’s a common way that newspaper Diarists start their entries.… but perhaps it’s a common way that British newspaper diarists start their entries, and sounds wrong to american ears. So I have changed it. Nations divided by a common language etc.
I think the thing that made it seem like a draft is the missing “I went” at the beginning of the article. I also noticed illustrate is misspelled, at a quick glance.
The opening was deliberate—it’s a common way that newspaper Diarists start their entries.… but perhaps it’s a common way that British newspaper diarists start their entries, and sounds wrong to american ears. So I have changed it. Nations divided by a common language etc.