I guess it depends on your definition of “good”. Care to quantify yours?
I guess you should quantify your own definition of the word, perhaps in the same post in which you ask someone else to quantify theirs, since you used it first.
I’d say p>0.95 that “Went on a graduation tour abroad and disappeared while visiting Albania.” is meant to communicate something to the readers that it does not communicate to the characters.
I’d say p>0.75 that the thing it is meant to communicate is that the hero was compromised by Riddle, like Quirrell was in canon.
I don’t expect it to be thesame. Voldemort’s shade in canon may have had possession capacity that young Tom Riddle did not.
I’d say p>0.5 that the hero was replaced, that Tom Riddle physically played both roles in his own flesh.
(I asked you to quantify what you meant by “good” because I was suspecting you were treating a probability of, say, 30% as “good”, and we were getting our terms crossed. Obviously not.)
I’d say p>0.75 that the thing it is meant to communicate is that the hero was compromised by Riddle, like Quirrell was in canon.
Whereas I’d put that at roughly p=0.25.
I mean, sure, it might be trying to communicate that, but, I’ve got:
“Reader! She’s about to undercover the Defense Professor is Voldemort!” as a message intended to be sent to the reader but not the characters at about p=0.25.
“The heroic Slytherin discovered something about Riddle in Albania in 1945, and spent his time trying to follow up on it. When Voldemort came back openly to Britain, so did he. What the hero learned in 1945, or in the years between 1945-1970, is going to be important to Harry’s defeat of Voldemort, and here’s the hint that keeps it from coming entirely out of the blue” (or variations of the theme) as about p=0.15
“The ‘heroic’ Slytherin died in 1945 in a confrontation with Riddle/Voldemort. In 1970, an ambitious person unconnected to Voldemort then tried to exploit the Voldemort’s rise as a chance to make himself leader of Britain under the dead man’s name, and died or quit in 1973. Voldemort then found it useful to try the same con as a backup for Quirrel.” at roughly p=0.15
And, “Eilizer is planning to do something else with it, that I haven’t thought of” at about p=0.2
I dismiss the bait and switch because the passage does not seem to lay down that tease; p0.8 he would clean out other things that only exist to support his ill conceived tease. There isn’t a WHAM paragraph with few words surrounded by white space. It’s just not built like a bait and switch shocker.
While reading, I thought that Scion of X did fight Riddle and did as Hermione suggested:
“You left your friends behind where they’d be safe, and tried to attack the Dark Wizard all by yourself?”
And after Voldemort killed him he kept the identity close because things like that can be useful. But I know that I am gullible and literal (p>0.2 that I under value literal interpretations after an alternative is available), so I dismissed that as soon as I thought up an explanation that worked on a more in character plot. p<0.01
I dismiss the unknown, unrelated, unremarked third party because of Conservation of Detail. p<0.01
I don’t have any other speculation worth mentioning, so “something else” gets p<0.25.
If 1970-1973 was a con by Voldemort, why was it given up in 1973? Surely he expected it to take longer than a couple of years to begin with, didn’t he?
“In all honesty,” said Professor Quirrell, looking up at the stars, “I still don’t understand it. They should have known that their lives depended on that man’s success. And yet it was as if they tried to do everything they could to make his life unpleasant. To throw every possible obstacle into his way. I was not naive, Miss Granger, I did not expect the power-holders to align themselves with me so quickly—not without something in it for themselves. But their power, too, was threatened; and so I was shocked how they seemed content to step back, and leave to that man all burdens of responsibility. They sneered at his performance, remarking among themselves how they would do better in his place, though they did not condescend to step forward.” Professor Quirrell shook his head as though in bemusement. “And it was the strangest thing—the Dark Wizard, that man’s dread nemesis—why, those who served him leapt eagerly to their tasks. The Dark Wizard grew crueler toward his followers, and they followed him all the more. Men fought for the chance to serve him, even as those whose lives depended on that other man made free to render his life difficult… I could not understand it, Miss Granger.” Professor Quirrell’s face was in shadow, as he looked upward. “Perhaps, by taking on himself the curse of action, that man removed it from all others? Was that why they felt free to hinder his battle against the Dark Wizard who would have enslaved them all? Believing men would act in their own interest was not cynicism, it turned out, but sheerest optimism; in reality men do not meet so high a standard. And so in time that one realized he might do better fighting the Dark Wizard alone, than with such followers at his back.”
I don’t know how long he thought it would take, but it sounds like he had no idea how hard it would suck.
If EY originally intended the bait and switch, then regretted it, p>0.8 he would clean out other things that only exist to support his ill conceived tease.
What other things?
That is, if the bait-and-switch was intended, he would’ve had to come up with an actual character that fit all those facts as well, and it seems like “he spent seven years sleeping in the same room as Voldemort” is a non-trivial detail to change.
If EY originally intended the bait and switch, then regretted it, p>0.8 he would clean out other things that only exist to support his ill conceived tease.
What other things?
The Albanian Shuffle. See says there is a real chance that it is mentioned just to string the reader along and make us think Bones is about to say that Quirrell is Riddle.
“Reader! She’s about to undercover the Defense Professor is Voldemort!” as a message intended to be sent to the reader but not the characters at about p=0.25.
I dismiss this because EY changed the date, which comes at the top of the passage, just so readers wouldn’t jump to think Bones is talking about Riddle. If EY took such a step to prevent the tease that Bones was about to name Riddle, then I would expect EY would not leave things in that were only there to build up that tease.
So the Albanian Shuffle is dismissively unlikely to be referenced for the sake of making the reader think Bones was about to name Riddle. I really don’t know how you could think that in the first place unless you first read that paragraph after already thinking that Bones was going to name Riddle.
Before the date change, there was a legitimate chance that the reader would come away from the discussion thinking that the person Bones was describing actually was Riddle, and that both Bones and Quirrell understood her to have been talking about Riddle. Which if unintended is a far greater problem than “thinking Bones was about to name Riddle, then it turns out no”. This was, in fact, my reading when I was actually going through the chapter.
(tl;dr: It’s not a “tease” that Bones was about to name Riddle that’s the problem, the problem is that it wasn’t resolved with a clear indication that they’re not talking about Riddle)
Changing the date fixes this because the reader can go look it up and realize that it can’t be Riddle after all.
Changing the date fixes this because the reader can go look it up and realize that it can’t be Riddle after all.
“OhmygodohmygodOHMYGOD! Bones is going to figure out Quirrell is Voldemort! OHMYGOD! What’s he going to do?!?! He’s surrounded by aurors, he’s in DMLE headquarters!… Oh my GOD! Those aurors are so screwed!!”
“Oh, hm. That’s not Riddle then. I wonder who it is?”
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Are you really suggesting that EY means the reader to do this? He said he wasn’t going to lie to us anymore. See’s low-probability theory of tease and WHAM involves EY lying to his readers, but your take on it that they were supposed to be totally tricked until the look it up online (?!?!) is turns that up to ridiculous levels.
The fact that the conversation doesn’t end with her actually saying Riddle is what would prompt readers to look it up. Are you saying that readers that are still with the fic after eighty chapters haven’t learned enough about rationality to take two minutes to verify an assumption after noticing they are confused?
He said he wasn’t going to lie to us anymore.
If that meant he couldn’t ever make a conversation that seems to be going one way but turns out to be different a few paragraphs later, it would lead to a VERY boring story.
P.S. My point was that the problem that EY fixed was that the obvious thing to check (looking up canon!Riddle’s biography) leads to an apparent confirmation.
That would only have changed if the year he started Hogwarts changed, which it did not. The birth date didn’t change by a whole year, just from late enough in 1926 to enter Hogwarts in 1938 to early enough in 1927 to enter Hogwarts in that same year.
(I lost track of what you were trying to argue, and the comment in isolation seemed to suggest that the non-trivial change had happened. A clause like “so the fact that this was carefully kept constant is evidence in favor of …” would have helped. )
I guess it depends on your definition of “good”. Care to quantify yours?
I guess you should quantify your own definition of the word, perhaps in the same post in which you ask someone else to quantify theirs, since you used it first.
I’d say p>0.95 that “Went on a graduation tour abroad and disappeared while visiting Albania.” is meant to communicate something to the readers that it does not communicate to the characters.
I’d say p>0.75 that the thing it is meant to communicate is that the hero was compromised by Riddle, like Quirrell was in canon.
I don’t expect it to be the same. Voldemort’s shade in canon may have had possession capacity that young Tom Riddle did not.
I’d say p>0.5 that the hero was replaced, that Tom Riddle physically played both roles in his own flesh.
Your turn.
(I asked you to quantify what you meant by “good” because I was suspecting you were treating a probability of, say, 30% as “good”, and we were getting our terms crossed. Obviously not.)
Whereas I’d put that at roughly p=0.25.
I mean, sure, it might be trying to communicate that, but, I’ve got:
“Reader! She’s about to undercover the Defense Professor is Voldemort!” as a message intended to be sent to the reader but not the characters at about p=0.25.
“The heroic Slytherin discovered something about Riddle in Albania in 1945, and spent his time trying to follow up on it. When Voldemort came back openly to Britain, so did he. What the hero learned in 1945, or in the years between 1945-1970, is going to be important to Harry’s defeat of Voldemort, and here’s the hint that keeps it from coming entirely out of the blue” (or variations of the theme) as about p=0.15
“The ‘heroic’ Slytherin died in 1945 in a confrontation with Riddle/Voldemort. In 1970, an ambitious person unconnected to Voldemort then tried to exploit the Voldemort’s rise as a chance to make himself leader of Britain under the dead man’s name, and died or quit in 1973. Voldemort then found it useful to try the same con as a backup for Quirrel.” at roughly p=0.15
And, “Eilizer is planning to do something else with it, that I haven’t thought of” at about p=0.2
Fantastic.
I dismiss the bait and switch because the passage does not seem to lay down that tease; p0.8 he would clean out other things that only exist to support his ill conceived tease. There isn’t a WHAM paragraph with few words surrounded by white space. It’s just not built like a bait and switch shocker.
While reading, I thought that Scion of X did fight Riddle and did as Hermione suggested:
And after Voldemort killed him he kept the identity close because things like that can be useful. But I know that I am gullible and literal (p>0.2 that I under value literal interpretations after an alternative is available), so I dismissed that as soon as I thought up an explanation that worked on a more in character plot. p<0.01
I dismiss the unknown, unrelated, unremarked third party because of Conservation of Detail. p<0.01
I don’t have any other speculation worth mentioning, so “something else” gets p<0.25.
If 1970-1973 was a con by Voldemort, why was it given up in 1973? Surely he expected it to take longer than a couple of years to begin with, didn’t he?
I don’t know how long he thought it would take, but it sounds like he had no idea how hard it would suck.
What other things?
That is, if the bait-and-switch was intended, he would’ve had to come up with an actual character that fit all those facts as well, and it seems like “he spent seven years sleeping in the same room as Voldemort” is a non-trivial detail to change.
The Albanian Shuffle. See says there is a real chance that it is mentioned just to string the reader along and make us think Bones is about to say that Quirrell is Riddle.
I dismiss this because EY changed the date, which comes at the top of the passage, just so readers wouldn’t jump to think Bones is talking about Riddle. If EY took such a step to prevent the tease that Bones was about to name Riddle, then I would expect EY would not leave things in that were only there to build up that tease.
So the Albanian Shuffle is dismissively unlikely to be referenced for the sake of making the reader think Bones was about to name Riddle. I really don’t know how you could think that in the first place unless you first read that paragraph after already thinking that Bones was going to name Riddle.
Before the date change, there was a legitimate chance that the reader would come away from the discussion thinking that the person Bones was describing actually was Riddle, and that both Bones and Quirrell understood her to have been talking about Riddle. Which if unintended is a far greater problem than “thinking Bones was about to name Riddle, then it turns out no”. This was, in fact, my reading when I was actually going through the chapter.
(tl;dr: It’s not a “tease” that Bones was about to name Riddle that’s the problem, the problem is that it wasn’t resolved with a clear indication that they’re not talking about Riddle)
Changing the date fixes this because the reader can go look it up and realize that it can’t be Riddle after all.
“OhmygodohmygodOHMYGOD! Bones is going to figure out Quirrell is Voldemort! OHMYGOD! What’s he going to do?!?! He’s surrounded by aurors, he’s in DMLE headquarters!… Oh my GOD! Those aurors are so screwed!!”
looks up Tom Riddle online because that’s totally what all readers would do
“Oh, hm. That’s not Riddle then. I wonder who it is?”
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Are you really suggesting that EY means the reader to do this? He said he wasn’t going to lie to us anymore. See’s low-probability theory of tease and WHAM involves EY lying to his readers, but your take on it that they were supposed to be totally tricked until the look it up online (?!?!) is turns that up to ridiculous levels.
The fact that the conversation doesn’t end with her actually saying Riddle is what would prompt readers to look it up. Are you saying that readers that are still with the fic after eighty chapters haven’t learned enough about rationality to take two minutes to verify an assumption after noticing they are confused?
If that meant he couldn’t ever make a conversation that seems to be going one way but turns out to be different a few paragraphs later, it would lead to a VERY boring story.
P.S. My point was that the problem that EY fixed was that the obvious thing to check (looking up canon!Riddle’s biography) leads to an apparent confirmation.
That would only have changed if the year he started Hogwarts changed, which it did not. The birth date didn’t change by a whole year, just from late enough in 1926 to enter Hogwarts in 1938 to early enough in 1927 to enter Hogwarts in that same year.
Yes. Exactly. That’s my point.
(Not sure why you said this.)
(I lost track of what you were trying to argue, and the comment in isolation seemed to suggest that the non-trivial change had happened. A clause like “so the fact that this was carefully kept constant is evidence in favor of …” would have helped. )