I’ve incorporated many of the edits you suggested to make it more readable and accessible.
I think the paragraph on pivotal acts is a key part of the original essay so I decided not to remove it.
Instead, I made some significant edits to the paragraph. The edits I made put more emphasis on the definition of what a pivotal act is and I tried to remove as much potentially offensive content as possible. For example, I removed the pivotal act example of ‘burn all GPUs’ and instead described the term more generally as an action that would reduce existential risk.
Thanks for providing some feedback.
I’ve incorporated many of the edits you suggested to make it more readable and accessible.
I think the paragraph on pivotal acts is a key part of the original essay so I decided not to remove it.
Instead, I made some significant edits to the paragraph. The edits I made put more emphasis on the definition of what a pivotal act is and I tried to remove as much potentially offensive content as possible. For example, I removed the pivotal act example of ‘burn all GPUs’ and instead described the term more generally as an action that would reduce existential risk.