Strongly upvoted for effort since it was sitting at −4 karma.
Though I do also think the setting has really unbelievable parts as gwern mentioned.
The quality of writing isn’t high enough to encourage the careful reader to gloss over those parts so it read mostly like an average YA fiction story to me.
With a lot of editing this might be worth a reread.
Strongly upvoted for effort since it was sitting at −4 karma.
Though I do also think the setting has really unbelievable parts as gwern mentioned.
The quality of writing isn’t high enough to encourage the careful reader to gloss over those parts so it read mostly like an average YA fiction story to me.
With a lot of editing this might be worth a reread.