Watched the video. Loved it. Except for the bit at the end, the positions were made to look too emotional rather than reasoned. Instead of saying an outraged “going to church makes him moral?” he could have said something along the lines of “you know who else went to church every day? Archbishop Richeleu and Girgori Rasputin. You know what they had in common, besides being high-ranking priests? They shanked a number of women that’s in the order of the hundreds” or maybe some shorter but equally strong counterexample in the “him going to church doesn’t prove anything” line, including that exact phrasing, especially if they’ve talked about the topic before.
There’s also a serious audio problem, I really had to strain my ears to listen.
Otherwise, as I said, I loved it, especially the implications of “living in the Metaverse”.
Yeah, you should have heard the sound before Danny cleaned it up ;) I should buy better equipment probably.
I think showing that the Uploads still react emotionally is going to be an important part of any work which features ’em, especially if they’re “smart” people, otherwise it can look like uploading turns you into a Spock-Bot. Mostly I was just trying to keep the dialog tight. My natural writing is way too verbose for a five minute video, perhaps I overcompensated there a little.
Watched the video. Loved it. Except for the bit at the end, the positions were made to look too emotional rather than reasoned. Instead of saying an outraged “going to church makes him moral?” he could have said something along the lines of “you know who else went to church every day? Archbishop Richeleu and Girgori Rasputin. You know what they had in common, besides being high-ranking priests? They shanked a number of women that’s in the order of the hundreds” or maybe some shorter but equally strong counterexample in the “him going to church doesn’t prove anything” line, including that exact phrasing, especially if they’ve talked about the topic before.
There’s also a serious audio problem, I really had to strain my ears to listen.
Otherwise, as I said, I loved it, especially the implications of “living in the Metaverse”.
Thanks.
Yeah, you should have heard the sound before Danny cleaned it up ;) I should buy better equipment probably.
I think showing that the Uploads still react emotionally is going to be an important part of any work which features ’em, especially if they’re “smart” people, otherwise it can look like uploading turns you into a Spock-Bot. Mostly I was just trying to keep the dialog tight. My natural writing is way too verbose for a five minute video, perhaps I overcompensated there a little.
I know that feel, bro. Whenever I write a play I have to compact the dialogues because there is no time-