What I don’t see in your outline, and what I think would make your proposed manifesto stronger, would be a chapter along the lines of “this is the steelmanned case for why continuing progress in technology is problematic and dangerous and for how humanity could prosper or avoid disaster by putting the brakes on it.”
Otherwise it does look like a preaching to the choir thing. Manifestos are often that sort of preaching, so maybe that’s okay for what you’re after, but for all the usual LW-communications-ethos reasons, I hope you decide on something better.
What I don’t see in your outline, and what I think would make your proposed manifesto stronger, would be a chapter along the lines of “this is the steelmanned case for why continuing progress in technology is problematic and dangerous and for how humanity could prosper or avoid disaster by putting the brakes on it.”
Otherwise it does look like a preaching to the choir thing. Manifestos are often that sort of preaching, so maybe that’s okay for what you’re after, but for all the usual LW-communications-ethos reasons, I hope you decide on something better.