In chapter 2, people don’t leave a room to laugh the way Harry’s parents do.
Also chapter, 2, McGonagall’s final statement while amusing isn’t something she should have sufficient data on to say yet.
The entire SPEW thing took way too long. Moreover, it actually comes across as accidentally anti-feminist. Harry is dealing with the terrible atrocity that is Azkaban and Hermione’s equivalent is fighting school bullies? And even that requires assistance from Harry?
For readers that don’t know what a horcrux is since they haven’t read the original books (which at this point is probably quite a few), what Voldemort did to the Pioneer plaque that is much harder to figure out. At least some minimal explanation would have been good. This can probably still get remedied. But I’m really worried that their existence is going to come across later as some sort of diabolus ex machina.
In chapter 2, people don’t leave a room to laugh the way Harry’s parents do.
Also chapter, 2, McGonagall’s final statement while amusing isn’t something she should have sufficient data on to say yet.
The entire SPEW thing took way too long. Moreover, it actually comes across as accidentally anti-feminist. Harry is dealing with the terrible atrocity that is Azkaban and Hermione’s equivalent is fighting school bullies? And even that requires assistance from Harry?
For readers that don’t know what a horcrux is since they haven’t read the original books (which at this point is probably quite a few), what Voldemort did to the Pioneer plaque that is much harder to figure out. At least some minimal explanation would have been good. This can probably still get remedied. But I’m really worried that their existence is going to come across later as some sort of diabolus ex machina.