My meta-comment is that you should have posted this in whatever the current HPMoR discussion thread is. It’s an established community norm that talk of the fanfic should be kept there. Downvoted for that reason.
My regular comment:
I would have had Eliezer spend way less time on the “Hermione fights an endless supply of bullies” subplot. I wouldn’t be averse to just removing it entirely.
I would also have all these damn hints and suggestions and leads and such be made explicit or way less subtle. I’m stupid and busy; I’m not going to get them on the first read, and I’m not going to read twice.
I LIKE subtlety. It flatters my ego if I see it, and if I don’t, I don’t know that I’m missing it. I hate how modern cop dramas feel the need to explain the significance of every clue to the viewer as soon as a character understands it. If you miss it, you’ll eventually figure it out when the plot comes around to it.
I LIKE subtlety. It flatters my ego if I see it, and if I don’t, I don’t know that I’m missing it.
Data point. I started this thread to complain about the blood of Atlantis. The conclusion is based on a long chain of conjunctive reasoning that basically feels like an asspull. Harry has absolutely no good reason to believe something that complex.
Then I when I went looking for the link, I realised that.… The chapter’s called “Hold Off on Proposing Solutions”.
The feeling of “that’s epic”-ness cannot be described in words.
My meta-comment is that you should have posted this in whatever the current HPMoR discussion thread is. It’s an established community norm that talk of the fanfic should be kept there. Downvoted for that reason.
My regular comment:
I would have had Eliezer spend way less time on the “Hermione fights an endless supply of bullies” subplot. I wouldn’t be averse to just removing it entirely.
I would also have all these damn hints and suggestions and leads and such be made explicit or way less subtle. I’m stupid and busy; I’m not going to get them on the first read, and I’m not going to read twice.
I LIKE subtlety. It flatters my ego if I see it, and if I don’t, I don’t know that I’m missing it. I hate how modern cop dramas feel the need to explain the significance of every clue to the viewer as soon as a character understands it. If you miss it, you’ll eventually figure it out when the plot comes around to it.
Data point. I started this thread to complain about the blood of Atlantis. The conclusion is based on a long chain of conjunctive reasoning that basically feels like an asspull. Harry has absolutely no good reason to believe something that complex.
Then I when I went looking for the link, I realised that.… The chapter’s called “Hold Off on Proposing Solutions”.
The feeling of “that’s epic”-ness cannot be described in words.
Well, I hope you think it’s okay that my tastes differ from yours.