If I were adding in the torture paragraph, it’d probably actually replace the “shade of gloom” paragraph. I think they end up closely stacked against each other—if you’re saving the three lines from “gloom” then the slight length of “torture” isn’t too bad. Then it’s just “which is more powerful,” which I’m still mulling over.
If I were adding in the torture paragraph, it’d probably actually replace the “shade of gloom” paragraph. I think they end up closely stacked against each other—if you’re saving the three lines from “gloom” then the slight length of “torture” isn’t too bad. Then it’s just “which is more powerful,” which I’m still mulling over.