You hedge your claim with phrases like ‘based on my personal experience’, “seems’, ‘hold the belief’, but many people will read over these as the point you make in the first sentence is quite strong. Extraordinary claims demand extraordinary evidence but you present only one extended point—and one that is controversial. This might give the impression that you have only this one. I suggest that you reference more of the evidence you have reviewed.
It may give the impression I have only one point, but that’s all I’m trying to do. I’m trying to point out that the approach to EA at the moment tends to be very cultish, at least in my local area. It’s not hard to find the relevant arguments furthering the position I’m hinting at, but they are already well developed by academic experts, just not presented within EA spaces online. I’m a shit writer, but I am knowledgable. Perhaps someone else can better communicate what I’m suggesting.
You hedge your claim with phrases like ‘based on my personal experience’, “seems’, ‘hold the belief’, but many people will read over these as the point you make in the first sentence is quite strong. Extraordinary claims demand extraordinary evidence but you present only one extended point—and one that is controversial. This might give the impression that you have only this one. I suggest that you reference more of the evidence you have reviewed.
It may give the impression I have only one point, but that’s all I’m trying to do. I’m trying to point out that the approach to EA at the moment tends to be very cultish, at least in my local area. It’s not hard to find the relevant arguments furthering the position I’m hinting at, but they are already well developed by academic experts, just not presented within EA spaces online. I’m a shit writer, but I am knowledgable. Perhaps someone else can better communicate what I’m suggesting.