Nice.
Rewrite of Chapter 6:
A resolution: Understanding this world: What a task it is!
A resolution:
Understanding this world:
What a task it is!
I like it. I think that’s definitely an improvement on the last line.
Here are a few more:
Chapter 8:
Meet Hermione Riddles and experiments Start a new friendship
Meet Hermione
Riddles and experiments
Start a new friendship
Chapter 9:
Waiting for sorting Genetics are confusing Never this before
Waiting for sorting
Genetics are confusing
Never this before
Chapter 10:
The hat is conscious! By asking, making sentience Oops. A big mistake.
The hat is conscious!
By asking, making sentience
Oops. A big mistake.
And another:
Ravenclaw sharpens But Hufflepuff dulls his coldness Where to put Harry?
Ravenclaw sharpens
But Hufflepuff dulls his coldness
Where to put Harry?
And:
On this day fate splits A great fork of destiny Which path is right?
On this day fate splits
A great fork of destiny
Which path is right?
One lone shouted word: SLYTHERIN! … Wait, what was that?! Kidding! RAVENCLAW!
One lone shouted word:
SLYTHERIN! … Wait, what was that?!
Kidding! RAVENCLAW!
Nice.
Rewrite of Chapter 6:
I like it. I think that’s definitely an improvement on the last line.
Here are a few more:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:
And another:
And:
And: