I like this a lot! I wish, as they say, that I could give this more than one (strong) upvote! I think if you continue writing, you could definitely make something at least as good at Friendship is Optimal. And if you continue past that, quite possibly even HPMOR.
Let me try to say a bit more about why I liked this so much. 1) As I was reading it, I was connecting the story / seeing parallels with my life. That’s always a plus in my book. The story helps me get a different handle on my reality. 2) I could empathize with all of the characters. Even though they weren’t fleshed out, they felt pretty real to me. 3) Of course the subject matter of utopias is interesting. But the additional mix of past lives in interesting as well. Would be interesting to read more about how that feels & works. 4) There’s also something a bit more nebulous… like the underlying attitude of the characters / story that feels refreshing. It’s not cynical.
I like this a lot! I wish, as they say, that I could give this more than one (strong) upvote! I think if you continue writing, you could definitely make something at least as good at Friendship is Optimal. And if you continue past that, quite possibly even HPMOR.
Let me try to say a bit more about why I liked this so much. 1) As I was reading it, I was connecting the story / seeing parallels with my life. That’s always a plus in my book. The story helps me get a different handle on my reality. 2) I could empathize with all of the characters. Even though they weren’t fleshed out, they felt pretty real to me. 3) Of course the subject matter of utopias is interesting. But the additional mix of past lives in interesting as well. Would be interesting to read more about how that feels & works. 4) There’s also something a bit more nebulous… like the underlying attitude of the characters / story that feels refreshing. It’s not cynical.
Thanks. I’ve written enough aborted novels to know I don’t like writing novels, but I will probably write a few more short stories at some point.