Since the topic of this post is on sub-optimal communication, I thought I’d point out that
I think you’d be more convincing if you learned about brevity.
reads as rather more condescending than I think you intended from the tone of the rest of your comment. Specifically, it implies not just that he needs to practice revising for brevity, but that he doesn’t even know what it is.
Since the topic of this post is on sub-optimal communication, I thought I’d point out that
reads as rather more condescending than I think you intended from the tone of the rest of your comment. Specifically, it implies not just that he needs to practice revising for brevity, but that he doesn’t even know what it is.