You were doing all right until the end. Too many of the words in your last few sentences are used in ways that do not fit together to make sense in any conventional way, and when I try to parse them anyway, the emphases land in odd places.
Try to use less jargon and rephrase?
You were doing all right until the end. Too many of the words in your last few sentences are used in ways that do not fit together to make sense in any conventional way, and when I try to parse them anyway, the emphases land in odd places.
Try to use less jargon and rephrase?