The part that interested me was both parts together. I upvoted it before the edits, but butchered like this, I am about one trivial impetus from downvoting. Primarily because the way it stands, it sounds like it means that “electrons” are “conscious” and other such woo.
Edit: I’ve decided not to downvote it, but I’m still dissatisfied with the way you’ve handled this.
The second half is re-posted, with a clear lead in to it at the bottom of the first, to guard against “woo”. I decided this was the best compromise between unity and requiring people to wade through an introduction that doesn’t serve them (see other comments by taw, Morendil, Jonathan_Graehl … ).
The part that interested me was both parts together. I upvoted it before the edits, but butchered like this, I am about one trivial impetus from downvoting. Primarily because the way it stands, it sounds like it means that “electrons” are “conscious” and other such woo.
Edit: I’ve decided not to downvote it, but I’m still dissatisfied with the way you’ve handled this.
The second half is re-posted, with a clear lead in to it at the bottom of the first, to guard against “woo”. I decided this was the best compromise between unity and requiring people to wade through an introduction that doesn’t serve them (see other comments by taw, Morendil, Jonathan_Graehl … ).
That’s a pretty good compromise—I’ll leave it there.