Ah, I see. By the way, I didn’t intend to sound hostile or condescending but I may have done so, in which case I’m sorry. I think it’s evidence you have potential as a writer, and it’s probably longer than anything I’ve ever written lol (I’m terrible at finishing things) - I just would have preferred you go through a revision phase or two before publishing it, and considered how to make the characters a bit more realistic. (For instance, it seems like he adjusts psychologically to the transformation much faster than a normal person would, and suddenly becomes a hero when previously he was just a kid.)
Another possible moral, btw, is that the freedom to develop oneself and experiment with alternative modes of being and organization is part of what makes us human—not our mere body plan. There is a case to be made that the people of Cloud Nine are more human than the people of the Founder’s perfect city.
Not to worry, no offense was taken. Indeed though, I have heard it said our ancestors were already cyborgs the minute one of them first sharpened a rock.
Ah, I see. By the way, I didn’t intend to sound hostile or condescending but I may have done so, in which case I’m sorry. I think it’s evidence you have potential as a writer, and it’s probably longer than anything I’ve ever written lol (I’m terrible at finishing things) - I just would have preferred you go through a revision phase or two before publishing it, and considered how to make the characters a bit more realistic. (For instance, it seems like he adjusts psychologically to the transformation much faster than a normal person would, and suddenly becomes a hero when previously he was just a kid.)
Another possible moral, btw, is that the freedom to develop oneself and experiment with alternative modes of being and organization is part of what makes us human—not our mere body plan. There is a case to be made that the people of Cloud Nine are more human than the people of the Founder’s perfect city.
Not to worry, no offense was taken. Indeed though, I have heard it said our ancestors were already cyborgs the minute one of them first sharpened a rock.