Something about the name-dropping and phrasing in the “super-committee” line is off-putting. I’m not sure how to fix it, though.
Agreed. Maybe it is because it feels like you are talking down to us with the name-dropping? Perhaps this should be tested with people who are unfamiliar with LW and AI-related ideas, to see if they have the same reaction.
Something about the name-dropping and phrasing in the “super-committee” line is off-putting. I’m not sure how to fix it, though.
In the second to last paragraph you write “nut” instead of “not”.
In the last paragraph you’re using the word “either” when I think “each” or “both” would be more correct.
Mostly this looks good.
Agreed. Maybe it is because it feels like you are talking down to us with the name-dropping? Perhaps this should be tested with people who are unfamiliar with LW and AI-related ideas, to see if they have the same reaction.
Thanks! A lot of the supercomittee weirdness is due to space constraints (this fits on 2 A4 sides—just about).
Using “both” now, thanks.