You traded off a lot of readability for the device of making the protagonist’s gender indeterminate. Was this intended to serve some literary purpose that I’m missing? On the whole the story didn’t seem to be about gender.
I also have to second DanArmak’s comment that if there was an overall point, I’m missing that also.
Key’s gender is not indeterminate. Ey is actually genderless. I’m sorry if I didn’t make that clear—there’s a bit about it in eir second conversation with Trellis.
I’m sorry if I didn’t make that clear—there’s a bit about it in eir second conversation with Trellis.
I thought it was pretty clear. The paragraph about ‘boy or girl’ make it screamingly obvious to me, even if the Spivak or general gender-indeterminacy of the kids hadn’t suggested it.
You traded off a lot of readability for the device of making the protagonist’s gender indeterminate. Was this intended to serve some literary purpose that I’m missing? On the whole the story didn’t seem to be about gender.
I also have to second DanArmak’s comment that if there was an overall point, I’m missing that also.
Key’s gender is not indeterminate. Ey is actually genderless. I’m sorry if I didn’t make that clear—there’s a bit about it in eir second conversation with Trellis.
Your gender pronouns just sapped 1% of my daily focusing ability.
I thought it was pretty clear. The paragraph about ‘boy or girl’ make it screamingly obvious to me, even if the Spivak or general gender-indeterminacy of the kids hadn’t suggested it.