That’s… pretty bad.
If this were my introduction to LW, I’d snort and go away. Or maybe stop to troll for a bit—this intro is soooo easy to make fun of.
I’d recommend to nuke this text from orbit and start anew.
Well, glad you didn’t choose the first option, then.
I seldom agree with Lumifer but this comment is right on track. Sorry OP, I am not sure what kind of Outsider you are thinking of, but I am having trouble of thinking of anyone outside LW for whom this way of framing it would be at all appealing.
That’s… pretty bad.
If this were my introduction to LW, I’d snort and go away. Or maybe stop to troll for a bit—this intro is soooo easy to make fun of.
I’d recommend to nuke this text from orbit and start anew.
Well, glad you didn’t choose the first option, then.
I seldom agree with Lumifer but this comment is right on track. Sorry OP, I am not sure what kind of Outsider you are thinking of, but I am having trouble of thinking of anyone outside LW for whom this way of framing it would be at all appealing.