The part where you debate the merits of this ridiculously arrogant plan and decide against it.
The premise that no one else cares is factually false, so reading farther seemed like a waste of time. You said at the top it would be fun for you to write it, so I assumed that was the main purpose, and it wasn’t even claiming to be worth my time.
The part where you debate the merits of this ridiculously arrogant plan and decide against it.
The premise that no one else cares is factually false, so reading farther seemed like a waste of time. You said at the top it would be fun for you to write it, so I assumed that was the main purpose, and it wasn’t even claiming to be worth my time.
Okay, that makes sense, thank you for the feedback! I’ll revise it.