Stylistic feedback: this was well-written. I didn’t notice any typos. However, there are a lot of ellipses (17 in 2k words), to the point that I found them somewhat distracting from the story. Also, these ellipses are all formatted as ”. . .”, i.e. as three periods and two spaces. So they take up extra room on the page due to the two extra spaces, and are rendered poorly at the end of a row. These latter issues don’t occur when you instead use something like an ellipsis symbol (“…”).
Stylistic feedback: this was well-written. I didn’t notice any typos. However, there are a lot of ellipses (17 in 2k words), to the point that I found them somewhat distracting from the story. Also, these ellipses are all formatted as ”. . .”, i.e. as three periods and two spaces. So they take up extra room on the page due to the two extra spaces, and are rendered poorly at the end of a row. These latter issues don’t occur when you instead use something like an ellipsis symbol (“…”).