Stylistic feedback: this was well-written. I didn’t notice any typos. However, there are a lot of ellipses (17 in 2k words), to the point that I found them somewhat distracting from the story. Also, these ellipses are all formatted as ”. . .”, i.e. as three periods and two spaces. So they take up extra room on the page due to the two extra spaces, and are rendered poorly at the end of a row. These latter issues don’t occur when you instead use something like an ellipsis symbol (“…”).
If you want to piss people off, you can also use periods and nonbreaking spaces. This way they linewrap nicely as well as demonstrating that you knew about typsetting but ignored it for some personal reason. . .
Stylistic feedback: this was well-written. I didn’t notice any typos. However, there are a lot of ellipses (17 in 2k words), to the point that I found them somewhat distracting from the story. Also, these ellipses are all formatted as ”. . .”, i.e. as three periods and two spaces. So they take up extra room on the page due to the two extra spaces, and are rendered poorly at the end of a row. These latter issues don’t occur when you instead use something like an ellipsis symbol (“…”).
If you want to piss people off, you can also use periods and nonbreaking spaces. This way they linewrap nicely as well as demonstrating that you knew about typsetting but ignored it for some personal reason. . .