I like the premise, it’s always good to have more of these stories. I can’t really say much about the writing or characterization, because I’m not into Naruto. I do have two pieces of constructive criticism.
So he had the argument, the chain of events that led to Asuma’s death. Now he just had to find a way to break up the argument.
How would he do that?
Of course. The Logical Fallacies. They were great at breaking up arguments.
So- assume for the sake of argument that there is an inherent flaw in the reasoning, due to a Fallacy lurking under the surface. What could it be? What likely fallacies would there be?
The way it’s written, this looks like a major case of writing the bottom line first. With some changes to the wording, the actual message (something along the lines of “you haven’t exhausted the solution space”, maybe) would be more clear.
Also, there’s a lot of really overt discussion of logical fallacies and emotional biases. If there was a way to make this more implied, for instance showing the principles in action more and describing them less, it would be more instructive and look less didactic.
I like the premise, it’s always good to have more of these stories. I can’t really say much about the writing or characterization, because I’m not into Naruto. I do have two pieces of constructive criticism.
The way it’s written, this looks like a major case of writing the bottom line first. With some changes to the wording, the actual message (something along the lines of “you haven’t exhausted the solution space”, maybe) would be more clear.
Also, there’s a lot of really overt discussion of logical fallacies and emotional biases. If there was a way to make this more implied, for instance showing the principles in action more and describing them less, it would be more instructive and look less didactic.
Good points. I’ll talk to the author about both of these issues.