It’s not the poetry that’s the problem, it’s the mysticism. Your quote sounds like the former, not the latter.
Or maybe “ancient wisdom” is the right term to describe what your version sounds like—but the point is, it tells people why to think some way, and if they endorse it, they endorse a good truth-seeking procedure for the right reason, which is the important part.
It’s not the poetry that’s the problem, it’s the mysticism. Your quote sounds like the former, not the latter.
Or maybe “ancient wisdom” is the right term to describe what your version sounds like—but the point is, it tells people why to think some way, and if they endorse it, they endorse a good truth-seeking procedure for the right reason, which is the important part.