I think this is way too technical-argument sounding I think; I expect people would either challenge you if they feel like they know enough or tune you out if they feel they don’t.
My initial impression is that starting with something a little less formal-sounding would be better, but actually I’d love to see a half dozen pitches and have people collect at least anecdotal evidence about which are effective.
Yes, it is too technical-sounding for most people.
But it is intended for very smart and technical/scientific people. That’s the only audience that has a chance of getting it, anyway—unless rationality training does the trick, that is :-)
It is meant as an intro, perhaps after the person has heard a bit about the topic, but you want to give them a clear summary to grasp the concept. Of course, it is not enough and is usually followed by more detail.
I think this is way too technical-argument sounding I think; I expect people would either challenge you if they feel like they know enough or tune you out if they feel they don’t.
My initial impression is that starting with something a little less formal-sounding would be better, but actually I’d love to see a half dozen pitches and have people collect at least anecdotal evidence about which are effective.
Yes, it is too technical-sounding for most people.
But it is intended for very smart and technical/scientific people. That’s the only audience that has a chance of getting it, anyway—unless rationality training does the trick, that is :-)
It is meant as an intro, perhaps after the person has heard a bit about the topic, but you want to give them a clear summary to grasp the concept. Of course, it is not enough and is usually followed by more detail.