I enjoyed it initially, but the enormous, self-righteous rant on the nature ‘confessors’ which are clearly a self insert of what the author clearly likes to see himself as really broke immersion. Really, it’s the same problem I have with everything the author has ever written.
The writing style’s still a lot better than your Harry Potter fanfic, which is still unreadable. Nice job on improving it, even if you had to throw your masturbatory fantasies in.
I enjoyed it initially, but the enormous, self-righteous rant on the nature ‘confessors’ which are clearly a self insert of what the author clearly likes to see himself as really broke immersion. Really, it’s the same problem I have with everything the author has ever written.
The writing style’s still a lot better than your Harry Potter fanfic, which is still unreadable. Nice job on improving it, even if you had to throw your masturbatory fantasies in.